Everyone is Edward Jenner, who is the inventor of the smallpox vaccine, very thankful, but who knows the unethical method he used to make this vaccine? Edward Jenner was a British doctor, who was very intrigued by the story that milkmaids, who caught cowpox, couldn’t get smallpox. Cowpox infects cows and can infect people, but the disease isn't very harmful for them. So, the doctor decided to take some moisture out of the bump of a milkmaid with cowpox and to inject this in the eight-year-old son of his gardener. The boy caught cowpox and recovered, but then Jenner injected him with the deadly smallpox. Luckily the boy was immune and Jenner became famous with his new vaccine.
Everyone is Edward Jenner, who is the inventor of the smallpox vaccine, very thankful, [reorder the parts of the sentence so that you do not split the phrase 'is very thankful'] but who knows the unethical method he used to make this vaccine? Edward Jenner was a British doctor, who was very intrigued by the story that milkmaids, who caught cowpox, couldn’t get smallpox. Cowpox infects cows and can infect people, but the disease isn't very harmful for them. So, the doctor decided to take some moisture out of the bump of a milkmaid with cowpox and to inject this in the eight-year-old son of his gardener. The boy caught cowpox and recovered, but then Jenner injected him with the deadly smallpox. Luckily the boy was immune and Jenner became famous with his new vaccine.
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